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[General] Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas
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I approve of this guide because it's pretty good. That said, I've given this one a proper going through, but I'll try to keep it brief; no 17-page critique from me:
  • Your structure is a bit odd. You put things like narration, wonderlands and switching in 'Concepts' while personality, visualisation and possession go in 'The Creation Process'. It would probably help if your ToC were better, too.

  • I personally hate your typography. I think it's ugly, the colours clash, and the page breaks are uncomfortable. Your line spacing is weird and your table of contents is plain broken. I guess I'm not really supported in my opinion there though.

  • Speaking of opinions, your guide is very opinionated. For example - although the majority here probably share your views on what a tulpa is - you waste no time impressing your own morality onto the reader and telling them exactly what you think is shallow and pathetic, and later on what makes you sick. Not to mention telling us all about what you think about switching despite never having switched (which just about makes your opinion worth as much as the reader's, to boot).

  • I find your mentality section odd. It's mostly typical but the two things that bother me are
    • how you never really defined 'doubt' clearly, at least until maybe a page in. Then you say "don't doubt that responses are your tulpa within reason" - which I personally disagree with, though I don't suppose that matters. But objectively that ignores the other forms that the great doubt monster takes, like "help my tulpa isn't real" or similar.
    • how you spend half the time saying "you shouldn't doubt ever" and half the time saying "you should deal with your doubt in a reasonable way". I'm not sure that the two are particularly compatible.
    As an example of both, take when you say "[I] thought of all the evidence that pointed toward his existence" and so forth. You imply that you doubted that he existed but what does that mean exactly? And assuming that you meant that he was sentient, only the second item is good evidence for that in my view, and even then not convincing.

  • As a minor thing I'm going to be pedantic about symbolism and point out that at two separate times you call things 'symbolism' which are not: at the bottom of page 4 and page 14 with "believing that something is harmful is symbolic".
  • And last bit of pedantry I promise: "Active forcing is generally more qualitative than passive forcing" is nonsense in two ways, both of which become obvious when 'qualitative' is looked up in a dictionary.


So there are a few things that you might want to consider assuming you ever edit this guide again which is maybe unlikely.
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Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Kiahdaj - 04-19-2013, 08:29 PM
RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Yori - 09-10-2013, 05:26 AM
RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Spice - 04-21-2013, 02:51 PM
RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Anonymous - 04-23-2013, 07:29 PM
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RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by tania - 06-06-2013, 10:52 AM
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RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Sands - 08-16-2013, 04:32 PM
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RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Evil - 09-21-2013, 11:39 PM
RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by waffles - 12-30-2013, 02:50 PM
RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Sands - 01-02-2014, 01:55 PM
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RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Sands - 01-29-2014, 11:30 AM
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RE: Kiahdaj's Absolute Guide to Tulpas - by Jake0 - 04-03-2014, 10:47 PM
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